Looking for Criticism for the opening two pages of my novel?

Okay...I think you've got a good idea, it just needs to be..fuller? I think would be the best word. The bit about being raised to worship the American Dollar, good. I like it, I like that you're not saying it's a good thing. Mentioning abortion, also good, 'cause unless you're trying to publish teenie-bopping trendybooks, I say push the controversy. Peoples' minds are stagnant, and as a writer it's your job to smack them out of that complacency. My only real problem with it is that your language gets kind of weird, it almost reads like a gossipy story at points (mostly in the first few paragraphs). Hope that helped and didn't hurt to much, I'm not trying to be a , just trying to be honest.